As Dan says, the characters are all copyrighted by DC Comics. Take Care. Also, this is one of the earlier drafts, so don't expect it to look clean... From: [D--SL--E] at [aol.com] Date: Sat, 18 Jun 94 18:48:48 EDT Subject: Re: Script Format Here you go, misspellings and all. And please feel free to repost, as long as you acknowledge DC's copyright on the characters and take care. JLA #83 Plot Dan Vado 1 Page 1 this is a splash page that has Wonder Woman and the Kerrilian Captain M'Bal, Corbett is kneeling on the floor and holding Blakes lifeless body. M'bal is angry as he is yelling at Wonder Woman. She in turn looks a little stunned. M'bal says IS EVERYONE ON THIS PLANET INSANE OR IS IT JUST LIMITED TO YOU PEOPLE. Wonder Woman Responds I CAN UNDERSTAND YOUR ANGER, CAPTAIN. I PROMISE YOU THAT GARDNER WILL BE CAUGHT AND BROUGHT TO JUSTICE. M'bal interupts and says I'M NOT SURE THAT I APPROVE OF YOUR BRAND OF JUSTICE. PAGE 2 Panel 1 we close in on Corbett holding Blake. We can see that he is cradeling Blake and crying. From off panel we hear M'Bal say CORBETT AND BLAKE MAY BE SLIME, BUT AT LEAST WE WOULD HAVE GIVEN THEM A TRIAL. THEY WOULD HAVE HAD AN OPPORTUNITY TO DEFEND THEMSELVES. YOUR MAN ROBBED BLAKE OF HIS DAY IN COURT. Panel 2 we cut back to Wonder Womanand M'Bal walking out to the observation deck of the JLA compound. Wonder Woman stammers to respond to M'bal saying BUT..... M'bal cuts her off saying BUT NOTHING ... VIGILANTISM AND SUMMARY JUSTICE HAVE NO PLACE IN A CIVILIZED SOCIETY to which Wonder Woman respond UNDERSTOOD CAPTAIN. Panel 3 This is sort of a worms eye view of M'bal, Blake and Corbett being pulled back up into the ship floating overhead. They look down at the camera as M'Bal says DO WHAT YOU WANT WITH YOUR MURDERER .... YOU WON'T BE SEEING US AGAIN! WHEN I RETURN HOME I PLAN ON MAKING THIS SYSTEM OFF LIMITS UNTIL YOUR HUMAN RIGHTS SITUATION IMPROVES...... FAREWELL AND GOOD RIDDENCE. Panel 4 we are back on the ground. Wonder Woman is in the foreground and still looking up in the air. Behind her we see Captain Atom, Ray, Bloodwynd and Maxima. Ray breaks the silence saying UH, WHAT NOW WONDER WOMAN. Panel 5, Wonder Woman responds without looking back EVERYONE FAN OUT FIND GUY AND BRING HIM BACK HERE! PAGE 3 PANEL 1 has Wonder Woman turning around and being met with Captain Atom who is flanked by CINDER and CRATER. Atom says I HAVE TO TALK TO MY SUPERIORS WONDER WOMAN, BUT I IMAGINE THE GOVERNMENT WILL WANT TO PROSECUTE GARDNER. Wonder Woman sullenly replies YES CAPTAIN ATOM .... I'D APPRECIATE ANY HELP YOU AND YOUR PEOPLE CAN GIVE US IN TRACKING DOWN GUY. Panel 2 the camera follows as Wonder Woman walks in from the observation deck and walks past Maxwell Lord. He is talking to her, but she barely acknowledges his presence as he says I'VE GONE AHEAD AND CALLED IN SOME EXTRA HANDS ... IF GARDNER'S GONE NUTS WE'LL NEED ALL THE HELP WE CAN GET. Wonder Woman mumbles a response saying GOOD GOOD. Wonder Woman walks to the table in the conference room, turns and looks at everyone and says NOW, IF YOU DON'T MIND, I'D LIKE A MOMENT ALONE. Panel 4 hhas Wonder Woman and rub her head as she sighs, from off panel we hear a voice says HEY LADY .... Panel 5 Wonder Woman turns around and is startled to see JAY GARRICK (the Flash) Standing in the doorway (Maybe leaning against the door with his arms crossed and the trademark Jay Garrick knowing smile.) He completes his sentence by saying YOU LOOK LIKE YOU COULD REALLY USE A FRIEND RIGHT NOW. Wonder Woman shouts JAY! WHEN DID YOU .... Jay interrupts saying I CAME AS SOON AS MAX CALLED. PAGE 4 Panel 1 has Wonder Woman stands and approaches Jay as she says BUT MAX MUST HAVE JUST CALLED .... NEVER MIND, I WASN'T THINKING, THANKS FOR COMING ... YOUR SPEED WILL BE A GREAT ASSET IN FINDING GUY. IF WE GO TOGETHER.... Panel 2 has Jay put his hand on Wonder Woman's shoulder as he says YES, BUT LET'S FORGET ABOUT GUY FOR NOW. HOW ARE YOU HOLDING UP .... YOU LOOKED PRETY DOWN IN THE MOUTH WHEN I WALKED IN. Wonder Woman lets out a sigh as she looks down and says I DON"T KNOW, JAY ..... I'M NOT SURE HOW QUALIFIED I AM TO LEAD THE LEAGUE. Panel 3. This is kind of difficult to explain, but in the last three panel of the page I was thinking of carrying on the conn=versation between Wonder Woman and Jay as they go out onto the observation deck and then through the city looking for Guy. My idea was that in each panel Wonder Woman would be flying and Guy would be just standing. The concept being that Jay was fast enough to run ahead of Wonder Woman as she flew and still carry on a conversation. I'm not sure how this would work, so if Kevin has some idea I will defer to his judgement. However it's handled Panel three should have Wonder Woman and Jay starting off of the observation deck. Wonder Woman is saying I'VE NEVER HAD ANY REASON TO QUESTION MY JUDGEMENT ION THE PAST ... BUT IT SEEMS THAT AS THE LEADER OF THE LEAGUE I'VE MADE A SERIES OF BAD DECISIONS ... FIRST ON SEYLONE, THEN WITH THE KERRILIANS. NOW GARDNER GOES OFF. I PROBABLY SHOULD HAVE SEEN THAT COMING. Panel 4 Jay interrupts saying SHOULD HAVE, COULD HAVE MIGHT HAVE ... DON'T DRIVE YOURSELF CRAZY SECOND GUESSING YOURSELF..... LOTS OF PEOPLE HAVE LEAD THE LEAGUE AND ALL OF THEM HAVE MADE MISTAKES..... SOME OF THEM WERE'NT CAPABLE OF LEARNING FROM THEIR MISTAKES PANEL 5 Jay continues saying ND IN MY BOOK, NOT LEARNING IS A BIGGER SIN THAN NOT KNOWING. AS FOR GARDNER, THERE'S NOW WAY YOU COULD HAVE KNOWN WHAT HE WAS CAPABLE OF .... THE PROBLEM WITH A LOSE CANNON IS ..... PAGE 5  We change scenes to Blue Beetel's lab where we see Beetle (still in civilian clothes) working on Booster's armor. Booster is hovering over him. He has put on his chest plate and is bothering Ted to hurry up getting his armor working (Note to Kevin , Maybe we should have Boosters Armor look burned or singed. Make it look like it's been hit hard by something). A caption provides a transition as Jay finishes saying ....THAT YOU CAN NEVER TELL WHEN IT WILL GO OFF. Booster is saying WILL YOU HURRY UP WITH THAT HING TED! .... GARDNERS PROBABLY HALF WAY TO GOD-KNOWS - WHERE BY NOW. Ted, not looking up from his work says I'M DOING THE BEST I CAN, BOOSTER. WHATEVER HIT YOU FRIED THE WHOLE WORKS .... EVEN IF I GET IT WORKING, I DOUBT THIS IS GOING TO BE SAFE FOR YOU TO WEAR. Booster grabs Ted from behind and shakes him. He is very agitated and angry as he says I DON'T GIVE A RATS BEHIND ABOUT SAFE.... JUST MAKE THE STUPID THING WORK! Ted, shocked, responds OK OK, RELAX BOOSTER. Panel 3 We zoom in on Ted's hands as he returns to work, sparks fly from the armors exposed wiring as he says I'VE UNFROZEN THE WORKS, ONCE THE POWER SUPPLY IS RECONNECTED YOU CAN PUT IT BACK ON IF THAT'S ALL YOU WANT. Panel 4 is a shot of Boster, arms crossed put with a grumpy look on his face, Ted is seated and he looks pissed off as he finishes off his work. Booster says THAN YOU. Ted retorts BUT I'M NOT GOING TO BE RESPONSIBLE IF YOU GET YOURSELF KILLED IN THIS THING. Booster responds NO PROBLEM. Ted again snaps back YOU SHOULD HAVE YOUR HEAD EXAMINED, BOOSTER. PANEL 5 has Booster shaking Ted again as he says MAYBE I'M CRAZY BUT AT LEAST I'M LIVING MY LIFE .... YOU''VE TURNED THIS LAB INTO A TOMB. Ted responds saying BACK OFF BOOSTER but booster keeps pressing the issue sayin NO! I WON'T BACK OFF. YOU CAN'T KEEP LIVING YOUR LIFE THIS WAY, TED. YOU CAN;T JUST HIDE IN THE DARK AND TURN YOUR BACK ON THE LEAGUE. Panel 6 has Ted turning from Booster and picking up his now repaired pieces of armor as he says I CAN DO ANYTHING I LIKE, BOOSTER..... HERE YOUR ARMORS FINSIHED. Booster is snatching at an arm or a leg or something as he snaps FINE.... IGNORE ME! Ted says BOOSTER, YOU JUST DON'T GET IT.... Page 6 This is a shot of Ted, hands out almost pleading, trying to explain how he feels to Booster. DOOMSDAY PUT ME IN A COMA... HE ALMOST KILLED US BOTH! AND YOU KNOW WHAT... THE WORLD BARELY NOTICED..... RISKING YOUR LIFE FOR AN UNCARING WORLD MAY MAKE YOU HAPPY, BUT I CAN'T DO IT ANYMORE. Booster comes face to face with Ted and looks him in the eye. This is a moment of high drama soap opera shit as Booster says WHAT ABOUT YOUR FRIENDS, TED ..... WHAT ABOUT US? Panel 3 Booster turns to leave with his arms full of pieces of his armor as he heads for the elevator and says YOU'RE RIGHT, TED. YOU CAN DO WHATEVER YOU LIKE..... JUST DON'T PRETEND THAT YOU'RE NOT LETTING PEOPLE DOWN. Ted turns and looks at the elevator doors shut as he says BOOSTER. Panels 5-7 Have Ted wlak through his lab, go up to a closet door and look at his Blue Beetle costume hanging on a hook. He sits down on the floor and stares up at his costume as he says DON'T YOU START. The last panel of the page is a close-up of one of the bubble eyes on the costumes head (this is as he is saying DON'T YOU START). Page 7 We change scenes yet again. We are now in the ice kingdom. This panel is a big panel with Ewald entering what looks like a medieval church or temple. There are carvings on the wall of heroic figures weilding clubs and swords and spears. There is an altar and on the altar we see some ancient weapons (this is specific, we see a sword, a staff, a club, a spear, a morningstar, a battle axe and a quiver of arrows with a long bow. Don't worry, we don't have to see this all in one panel, I just want you to know upfront what was there. These are all ancient weapons with some sort of historical and religous signifigance and should look ornate). As Ewald enters the temple there are a couple of cloaked holy men standing near the altar. One of them has approached Ewald. A cpation provides a transition with Blue Beetle saying STOP MAKING ME FEEL LIKE I'M CRAZY. Ewald looks at one of the holy men and asks HOW GO THE PREPERATIONS FOR THE CEREMONY, CLERIC. The preist answers ALL IS READY LORD EWALD ... BUT THE OLD ONES HAVE NOT BEEN CALLED UPON IN MANY GENERATIONS .... I CANNOT BE CERTAIN THAT THEY CAN STILL BE CALLED.... Panel 2 has Ewald angrily grabbing the cleric by the throat and lifting him off his feet and squeezes, cjoking the man and shocking the other priests as he says UNCERTAINTY CAN BE FATAL, CLERIC. PARTICULARLY WHEN THE STAKES ARE SO HIGH .... NOW ALL OF YOU GO, I MUST TEND TO MY ... MEDITATIONS. Panel 3 has Ewald watch as the preists walk out and shut a large wooden door. Panel 4 Ewald turns to the altar and loks skyward, the anger has left his face and has been replaced by fear as he says DARK ONE, ALL IS READY ..... PAGE 8 We start with a large panel a shaft of dark light and energy comes streaking out from the top of the panel to the front of the altar. Just above the altar we see the outline of a face, it has a familiar look but we can't be too sure who it is. This is our first look at THE OVERMASTER, but the readers shouldn't know who it is, or if they guess they should think that it's DARKSEID. The Overmaster is a big God like creature from the JL of A days. He is intent on fulfilling his original mission which was global domination, but this time he is going at it in a way that will confuse and throw the earth's greatest heroes off balance. At any rate, when we see his face in this scene and subsuquent scenes we should only see enough detail to suggest that, if this is anyone, it is Darkseid. This panel should be a big splashy panel with the bolt of energy looking so powerful that it throws Ewald off balance and to the floor. The Overmasters face should have an agry look to it. He is saying ALL IS NOT IN READINESS, MORTAL! YOU HAVE ALLOWED YOUR MOTHER TO ESCAPE THE CITY.... AS WE SPEAK SHE IS SUMMONING YOUR SISTERS COLLEGUES .... Ewald, now sitting on the floor looks near the altar as we can see some of the weapons that were placed there. He says MY SISTER'S ... BUT SURELY THE POWER OF THE OLD ONES SHOULD BE ENOUGH TO TURN THEM BACK? Overmaster interrupts from off panel as he says YOU ARE AN IDIOT, MORTAL ... Panel 3 we close in one the Overmasters face as he says THOSE ARTIFACTS THAT YOU CHERISH ARE MEARLY RELICS OF AN EMPIRE LONG SINCE DEAD .. . THEY HAVE NO INTRINSIC POWER OF THEIR OWN, THEY ARE MEARLY CONDUITS TO A HIGHER POWER .... THE ENTITIES THAT GAVE THEM THEIR POWER HAVE PASSED ON TO ASNOTHER EALITY ..... Panel 4 is a shot of the wepons on the altar as they start to glow and spark and smoke as the Overmaster says WATCH AS THEY NOW BECOME THE CONDUITS OF MY POWER. PAGE 9 Panel 1 is a small panel that has Ewald shielding his eyes from a bright light, from off panel we hear the overmaster say BEHOLD AS I SHOW YOU THE TRUE MEANING OF THE WORD POWER ... Panel 2 is a big panel that takes up the rest of the page. What we see are six huge giants in armor. One of them is holding the sword, another the spear, another the bow and arrows, another the morningstar, another the club another the axe. Ewald is staring up at the giants from the floor as the overmaster says YHESE, I BELIEVE, ARE YOUR ANCINET ONES.